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It was Her

December 31, 2013
By 343shernandez SILVER, El Cajon, California
343shernandez SILVER, El Cajon, California
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Time and effort and sweat don&#039;t betray you.<br /> Only a loser will put the blame on bad luck.<br /> &quot;Miracle&quot; is another word for hard work.


The Doll was our looker-on — We were loudly Shouting —
The echo of our voices in the room —
That was It

The bottle on the dresser —
The disheveled bed —
His clothes on the floor —
That was It

The Doll was in the hallway — with Its blank, porcelain stare —
I was on my feet — still Shouting

The pieces of bottle on the floor —
The blood on His lip —
The ring on the floor —
That was It

The Car was gone —
The Doll and I were left —
The gun in my hand —
The Doll was left

That was It


The author's comments:
I wrote this as a creative writing piece in English, in which I was to imitate Emily Dickinson's writing style. At first, I was going to bring the idea of divorce and a spider together, but as I continued writing and editing it became something more thoughtful and carried a deeper meaning. I was inspired to change the spider to a doll, as the spider wasn't fitting into the story to the extent I wanted; there was no purpose of having a spider. I hope the readers of my poem can make out what the doll represents in the situation. What I hope my readers can take from this is an awareness of the effects of drug abuse and bad romance can lead to.

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